The Funky Monkey was her favorite bar.  Or her new favorite bar.  Everything lately was brand new.  New supermarket, new manicurist, new apartment, new friends.  New life.

She was certain her boss had just replaced her on the sales floor when she hadn’t come in a few days in a row.  Her so-called friends had probably shrugged and ordered another round of drinks.  And Jared, the boyfriend she neglected to dump before she left town, had likely deleted her number and called one of his many admirers.  Good riddance.

She nearly fell off her barstool when she saw Jared speaking at a press conference on the TV above the bar, flanked by police officers.  The screen changed, and she saw her own face, a photo taken by Jared during a perfect day at the lake.  She looked nothing like that now.  Her hair was shorter and dyed jet black, her skin deeply tanned, colored contacts in her eyes.  She blinked away tears.

“You know that guy?”  The bartender asked.

She nodded as she downed another shot.


For Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers 



20 comments on “Unforgettable

  1. Sounds like she left her old life behind to start anew. Sad that her old boyfriend is still looking for her and she doesn’t want to be found. Wonderful story, Jenn!

  2. The great escape, or not based on the ending.
    Nice detailing on the lead up to the reveal. Im not sure if she did something bad or just wanted away.

  3. Well, someone is still looking for her.

  4. Joan says:

    Many of us are like her, never wanting to make peace with our past. So we give it the power to haunt us while we masquerade

  5. iainthekid says:

    Good writing. I wonder if she is ever found or manages to stay away from her past.

  6. Singledust says:

    i feel her tears are not of sadness for what she had to leave behind but rather that of joy and why she never did it sooner…..great writing Jenn!

  7. jademwong says:

    So…she ran away? From an old life of unhappiness to a blank slate? Good for her!! I’d like to think she’s finding herself in her new life and I hope she’s happy 🙂

  8. Nice twist – finally realizing that someone actually did miss her. Now, if he only put that much effort in letting her know before she left. That would have been good. 🙂

  9. mandibelle16 says:

    I can sympathize with her feeling to want to run away and start anew it’s everything. Sometimes, it can feel like that’s the best option. But I think she left behind someone who really misses and cares about her, who she really cared about. I doesn’t appear that all of Jared’s ‘admirers’ were as important to him, as she was and is. Hope she goes and finds him.

  10. BarbCT says:

    I get the sense that she left to start a new life because she felt like she didn’t matter to anyone. I hope that she realized she was wrong and that love can conquer all, if she’ll just give it a chance.

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s