No Regrets

She couldn’t go back.  From here, the party looked beautiful.  She sat in the soft grass on the hillside under a starry sky, surrounded by the rose bushes fragrant and heavy with blooms.  From her vantage point, she could see it all.  Twinkling lights.   The flower girl and ring bearer chasing each other and laughing, weaving between the tables.  The girl had spilled punch down the front of her dress; the boy’s mouth looked sticky with white icing.  Her mother, wiping away tears of joy.  Her father, placing a comforting hand on her mom’s back as he led her to the dance floor.  Her sister, Lara, resplendent in a blindingly white wedding gown, resting her forehead on Eric’s shoulder as they gently swayed to the music.

Rummaging in her tiny purse, she found the folded note Eric had pressed into her hand with a frozen smile that morning.  No regrets.  She smiled inside and read the words again.

For Flash Friday!

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4 thoughts on “No Regrets

  1. Hi Jenn,
    I was one of the judges for Flash Friday and before we discovered it came in under the word count, we’d already selected you as an Honorable Mention complete with full comments. So, I thought I’d leave my judge comments here, if your don’t mind:

    “No Regrets”–Being a sucker for concrete details, I was drawn right into this one. The distance the writer sets up between the narrator and the wedding scene plays out beautifully, the physical distance emphasizing the emotional distance. The focus on innocence in the figures of the flower girl and ring bearer also stands out as significant. Not only does it signal the longing for a simpler, playful time, but it also highlights the boisterous messiness of the two, a fun messiness that contrasts with the adult messiness of MC’s relationship with the groom—a contrast, too, to the cleanliness of the bride’s “blindingly white” dress (and socially-approved relationship). The contents of the note remain unsaid, so we’re left unsure if Eric wants to continue the affair or if it’s a “Dear Jane”. Sometimes that type of ambiguity is frustrating, but it works here.

  2. I was feeling sorry for the MC, and then I read the review by Necwrites above.. and then realised that it probably wasn’t a Dear Jane after all! Great story!

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