My first time submitting a story for Sunday Photo Fiction!  I love these writing challenges.  So much fun!


“Hitchhike?”  Amanda asked incredulously.

“Yep,” Taylor responded.  “I’ve done it tons of times.”

“I don’t believe you.”  Amanda and Taylor, best friends and neighbors since 2nd grade, were running away.   Amanda’s parents were unbelievably strict.  And Taylor’s mom’s brain was so fried she probably wouldn’t even notice she was gone for a few days.  Why stay?

“Okay, maybe not tons of times.  But I’ve done it.”

They arrived at the main road, the truck stop/gas station that faced their subdivision was well-lit and bustling despite the late hour.

“Come on, I’ll show you how easy it is.”

Amanda waited out front while Taylor went to the back parking lot to find a driver willing to take them to the next town.  She was back within minutes.

“I found a guy, but we need to leave now.”

“Tay…I don’t think this is a good idea.   What if…”

“Amanda, come onnnnnn.”

“It’s too dangerous.  Let’s just walk.”

“That’ll take hours.  Someone might see us!”

“No.”  Amanda took a step back.  Her decision was final.

A big rig drove past, blaring its horn.  “Fine, stay.  I’m getting out of here.”

“Taylor, no!!!”  Amanda grabbed Taylor’s arm, but she shook her off, causing her to fall in the gravel.  She stood to see Taylor blowing her a kiss from the open cab window.  Amanda ran after it as long as she could, screaming for Taylor, until it rounded a curve and disappeared.

16 thoughts on “Runaways

  1. Good story. 🙂 Doing things on impulse is not always a good thing, especially in this case. Amanda made the right decision, but too bad she couldn’t stop Taylor from going.

  2. Nice dialogue — and you definitely get the sense that this one conversation might be a turning point in both of their lives. Sounds like Amanda’s parents might have good reason for being so strict, if she hangs out with someone who’s such a bad influence — and someone who would abandon her best friend so readily.

      1. I think most of us struggle with dialogue. But this comes across as believable for the age of the characters. Too often I see adults writing teenagers talking like middle-aged people… does *not* work.

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